Showing posts with label novel. Show all posts
Showing posts with label novel. Show all posts
Wednesday, November 28, 2012
Reached 50,000 but the story ain't over yet...
I reached 50,000 words on the 25th. I should have felt proud, relieved and happy that I fulfilled the requirements for Nanowrimo 2012. After all, my novels in my past 2 Nanos barely scraped by the word count. This one surpassed those two by a bit.
Yes, I finished Nano, but I'm still working on the story. To my surprise and delight, I'm finding that my characters still have so much to say. "Don't edit until December." as the maxim goes. Since 'Shadow of the Queen' is technically the third in my "Four Lands" series, events in this one influences all the other stories in the series. I gave one major character a brother that didn't exist before, and to make things interesting, the brothers are on opposite sides of a brewing war.
I've made notes on what has changed (character names, place names, timeline changes, etc.) so I can keep my details consistent through the series. I've read stories where things didn't make sense with what came before and it's one sure-fire way of pulling me out of the story as a reader.
'Shadow of the Queen' introduces a new world that is a blend of ancient Indian/Arabian/Persian elements. I thought I could fit in all the descriptions of the festivals and rituals in 50,000 words. I was pleasantly mistaken. During Nano, I touched on the major plot points, but skimped on the little details. Now I have the time to expand on those details that make this alternate universe seem more real.
So November is nearly finished, and Nano 2012 is nearly at an end. But my writing journey is still (and always will be) ongoing.
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Friday, November 23, 2012
Preview for Nanowrimo 2012 'Shadow of the Queen' (iii)
Here is a quick scene I wrote in the midst of Thanksgiving chaos at my family's house.
Zeina 'accidentally' foils an assassination attempt...without meaning to do it. Gareth is the household's Captain of the Guard, who has secrets of his own.
*****
A hand clapped over my mouth and stifled my surprised yell. Then a strong arm wrapped around my waist and pulled me backwards into the nearest alcove. Warm breath tickled my ear, and jolts of pleasure shot down my nerves,
Suraya bless! I felt a hot flush scorch my face and throat. Suddenly, Najani's ribald teasing took on a new meaning. I wasn't unschooled in such matters, but I throttled the urge to twist around and give in to those impulses.
I was aware of the rhythm of a strong heartbeat as my back pressed against a solid chest, and the smell of jasmine--my own perfumed silks--tickled my nose.The iron-grip tightened for a second, as if its owner could read the tumult of my mind. It slowly eased, as if regaining some sort of control.
"Say nothing. We must remain hidden until the time is right. Understand?"
Gareth! I nodded, then those arms released me as quickly as they had captured me. I whirled around to see his large form pressed against the stone wall of the corridor. He wore the colors of Lord Kidoshu's house, but no protective armor. The torchlight threw his pale skin into sharp relief.
Gareth?
He shook his head and tapped the side of his head with an index fingers. Mental shields are up. I nodded to show him I understood. He turned away from me, his gaze riveted around the corner, at the figures at the front of the Main Hall. Lord Kidoshu, the First Wife, the Caliph and his mate, the Sultana.
Again, I felt that odd stir of anticipation, as if something was about to happen. The torchlight flickered and briefly danced upon the metal tip of an arrow, poking out from behind a heavy curtain.
Aimed directly at the Sultana.
The silent arrow erupted from behind the curtain, and flew across the Main Hall, above the heads of the guests and Handmaidens. I reacted without conscious thought; I extended a hand and nudged its course slightly.
But I wasn't quick enough, and I felt the arrow strike home within my own chest.
I blinked to find myself within the Main Hall, standing directly in front of the honored guests, without any memory of how I got there. A sharp sting drew my gaze downward to find the wooden shaft buried in the left side of my body.
The paralysis released me and I sank to the floor, my nerves ablaze with pain. Seconds dragged into eternity, as a blur of chaos exploded above me. Shouts, screams, curses...but I barely heard them. All my senses began to shut down and I allowed it, now beyond caring.
Suddenly, a burst of rage overwhelmed my mind, and like molten heat, it swept aside everything in its path. The image of a hunting hawk formed in my mind, golden wings spread across the sky, talons outstretched to rip its prey apart. The enemy froze, unable to take its eyes off the majestic sight...
Pain, agony, blood. The torture lasted only moments in reality, but here, within the mystic realm, those moments stretched into years, then centuries. The enemy screamed and begged for mercy, for release, but the Hawk reveled in its revenge.
And by the time it had finished, the enemy lay there, its lifeblood oozing out of its many wounds, to paint the mind-scape a blackish red.
All original writing and art copyright A. Dameron 2000-2012
Zeina 'accidentally' foils an assassination attempt...without meaning to do it. Gareth is the household's Captain of the Guard, who has secrets of his own.
*****
A hand clapped over my mouth and stifled my surprised yell. Then a strong arm wrapped around my waist and pulled me backwards into the nearest alcove. Warm breath tickled my ear, and jolts of pleasure shot down my nerves,
Suraya bless! I felt a hot flush scorch my face and throat. Suddenly, Najani's ribald teasing took on a new meaning. I wasn't unschooled in such matters, but I throttled the urge to twist around and give in to those impulses.
I was aware of the rhythm of a strong heartbeat as my back pressed against a solid chest, and the smell of jasmine--my own perfumed silks--tickled my nose.The iron-grip tightened for a second, as if its owner could read the tumult of my mind. It slowly eased, as if regaining some sort of control.
"Say nothing. We must remain hidden until the time is right. Understand?"
Gareth! I nodded, then those arms released me as quickly as they had captured me. I whirled around to see his large form pressed against the stone wall of the corridor. He wore the colors of Lord Kidoshu's house, but no protective armor. The torchlight threw his pale skin into sharp relief.
Gareth?
He shook his head and tapped the side of his head with an index fingers. Mental shields are up. I nodded to show him I understood. He turned away from me, his gaze riveted around the corner, at the figures at the front of the Main Hall. Lord Kidoshu, the First Wife, the Caliph and his mate, the Sultana.
Again, I felt that odd stir of anticipation, as if something was about to happen. The torchlight flickered and briefly danced upon the metal tip of an arrow, poking out from behind a heavy curtain.
Aimed directly at the Sultana.
The silent arrow erupted from behind the curtain, and flew across the Main Hall, above the heads of the guests and Handmaidens. I reacted without conscious thought; I extended a hand and nudged its course slightly.
But I wasn't quick enough, and I felt the arrow strike home within my own chest.
I blinked to find myself within the Main Hall, standing directly in front of the honored guests, without any memory of how I got there. A sharp sting drew my gaze downward to find the wooden shaft buried in the left side of my body.
The paralysis released me and I sank to the floor, my nerves ablaze with pain. Seconds dragged into eternity, as a blur of chaos exploded above me. Shouts, screams, curses...but I barely heard them. All my senses began to shut down and I allowed it, now beyond caring.
Suddenly, a burst of rage overwhelmed my mind, and like molten heat, it swept aside everything in its path. The image of a hunting hawk formed in my mind, golden wings spread across the sky, talons outstretched to rip its prey apart. The enemy froze, unable to take its eyes off the majestic sight...
Pain, agony, blood. The torture lasted only moments in reality, but here, within the mystic realm, those moments stretched into years, then centuries. The enemy screamed and begged for mercy, for release, but the Hawk reveled in its revenge.
And by the time it had finished, the enemy lay there, its lifeblood oozing out of its many wounds, to paint the mind-scape a blackish red.
That warm energy seeped into my muscles and bones, fusing itself with
me as it bathed and soothed the agony away. I relaxed into it and
allowed it to take my Soul with it.
All original writing and art copyright A. Dameron 2000-2012
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Saturday, November 17, 2012
Preview of 'Shadow of the Queen' (II) Nanowrimo 2012
In this preview, the main character learns a harsh lesson in manipulation and loyalty.
In this household, you must 'earn' a proper name. The main character hasn't been assigned one yet, so her nickname here is 'Steady One'.
*****
All original writing and art copyright A. Dameron 2000-2012
In this household, you must 'earn' a proper name. The main character hasn't been assigned one yet, so her nickname here is 'Steady One'.
*****
“Can you do this? Can you do that?”
The dance teachers started each new lesson with movement. We imitated
monkeys, birds and double-tusked elephants. We laughed as we imagined
long-legged river herons and jumping toads. The most awkward of the
shekka forgot their
self-consciousness and joined in the fun.
There was a method
to the madness, for those movements were the basis for new dances.
Once we perfected a particular step, we used it for courtly and
Festival dances. This made it possible to progress rapidly within the
ranks. The teachers kept a close eye on who thrived on dancing.
The local
chieftains from around Karamanthore visited Lord Kidoshu every
moon-cycle. They sat in private consultation for a whole day. The
Fourth Wife told us that these chieftains served Lord Kidoshu's
outlying districts. They collected the taxes and served minor duties.
Their ranks, like the household, changed constantly.
“We
cannot have one of the chieftains get too ambitious,” the Fourth
Wife commented. “If they have it in their minds that they are
better than Lord Kidoshu, there could be problems in Karamanthore,
and that wouldn't be good for the people.”
Calm One nodded in
a wise way and said, “There can be many helpers in the cause, but
only one leader. There are many aspects of the Goddess, but only one
Being over all.”
“Exactly
so,” agreed the Fourth Wife, who stroked Calm One's hair with a
gentle hand. “There are many variations to the dance, but one
original set of steps that began it.”
“Variations
are a way of life, as long as we don't forget where we came from.”
I
rolled my eyes as the platitudes were volleyed to and fro. The Wives
and their favorite ones constantly reminded us about the virtues of
our household and how to uphold them. I honestly wondered if they
even knew
about what they talked, much less understood
it.
There was one saying that came from the most cynical of the
Handmaidens: “ Do as I say, don't do as I do.” Our lives was one
whole contradiction of good intentions with good actions. I wondered
whether or not the Shinwai had this problem.
Unfortunately, I discovered fairly quickly that in certain
situations, doing as you are told might lead to an unpleasant truth.
“Steady
One, I have a task for you,” the dance teacher said. “Silkhair
and Bold One already have the solo pieces, but we need someone for an
equally important part.”
I made a gesture of
acceptance. Yes, Silkhair and Bold One were the favored among the
dance teachers. I had long ceased to feel any jealousy towards them,
although I wished that I was better.
“The
younger girls of the third shekka
are having problems with their parts in the ceremony, and the Sixth
Wife has trouble keeping instructors. Will you spare a morning and
show them what to do? It should not be an inconvenience, for their
parts are much simpler than ours.”
I
stifled a groan of dismay and bowed instead. “Of course, madrana.”
Unfortunately,
I discovered just why
the other instructors had left Sixth Wife's employment. The woman
possessed a waspish temper, with a tongue to match. Her cutting
criticism reduced her Handmaidens to tears. I watched as she
upbraided her shekka
because a single table arrangement was not perfect. The shekka
lived in complete fear of her.
“You
can deal with them; I cannot seem to get through their thick skulls,”
she complained. With that ominous statement, she turned and left the
room. I glared at her back and thought, You
evil witch. Perhaps if you learned patience, you might see more
progress.
I sighed and took pity on the Handmaidens. They crouched down low
before me, trembling in abject fear of punishment. This was
unacceptable. I cleared my throat and clapped my hands, just like I
had seen the Second Wife do. They jumped up to their feet as if I had
whipped them.
“Show
me what you know,” I said calmly and gestured to the marble-tiled
tables behind me. “Let us assume the Caliph and his household is
visiting. Arrange the seating with that in mind.”
The
Handmaidens scrambled to obey. They moved gracefully from table to
table, placing water pitchers and lighting incense burners. Others
set golden and scarlet cushions and blankets on the floor, and
followed the complicated rules of hospitality. I narrowed my eyes at
their efforts; to my eyes, all seemed in order. This was what the
third shekka was
trained for, and they seemed to do it well.
I walked among the seats and scrutinized the placements. The colors
and fabrics matched, and the girls had filled the water pitchers to
the correct level. I nodded and said, “Yes, that will do. Now, let
me give you another test.”
With a flourish, I glided to the main table and sat in the Caliph's
wife's place. The Handmaidens' eyes bulged with shock and surprise at
such audacity. I bit back a smile and lounged against the cushions.
“I would like to see the Ritual of Hospitality, if you please. The
Sultana, wife of the Caliph, wishes it.”
They giggled nervously at my overacting, but the tension dissipated
like smoke. They assembled into a small choir and began a song of
welcome. I listened to the harmony and tapped the beat with my
fingers. Again, their training served them well, for no one missed a
note or a rhythm.
It
became clearer to me that the problem did not lie with the girls of
the third shekka.
The problem lay with the Sixth Wife's attitude towards her girls. I
posed different scenarios to the Handmaidens and acted the part of
the particular honored guest in question. They quickly adapted to the
changing circumstances by switching the color schemes to match the
colors of the guest's household. They arranged the seating from high
rank to low, and they changed the theoretical menu to one appropriate
for the occasion.
“I
see that the problems have been quite exaggerated.”
We all jumped at the sound of the First Wife's voice and immediately
bowed in response. She stood just within my line of vision, her hands
hidden within her robes and her face shadowed within her hood. I saw
her as an imposing Priestess of Blessed Suraya, then the Vision
disappeared.
The
First Wife walked among the ranks, then stopped in front of me. “You
inspired them to do their best, Steady One, even though you aren't
even in their shekka.
I am impressed at your fortitude. Don't you agree, Lady Shalali?”
The
Sixth Wife flinched at the informal address, said so casually in
front of her shekka.
“Yes,” she said shortly.
“A
mere Handmaiden has accomplished this in half a day. You, a Wife,
needed most of a season to do the same, and she still managed to do
more.” The First Wife's tone took on a hard edge. “Pathetic.”
I swallowed hard at the First Wife's praise, for it wasn't as
uplifting as it sounded. It only served to highlight just how
incompetent the Sixth Wife had been in her duties. I had just earned
myself another enemy in the household, and one of the Wives, no less!
Then the First Wife did something unprecedented. “Girls, look at
what I am about to do and remember it.”
We followed the order and gaped as she reached over to the Sixth
Wife's robe. With a sharp tug, she ripped the costly golden flilagree
necklace from the Sixth Wife's neck. The matching earrings followed,
then the single bronze circlet in the Sixth Wife's hair. The First
Wife tossed these precious pieces of jewelry over her shoulder
without even looking at them.
“You
are dismissed. Go back to your former family in disgrace. Your rank
as Sixth Wife no longer exists; your true name will be spoken with
disgust...Shalali.”
We gasped at the sarcastic tone; the First Wife hadn't even bothered
with the title of 'Lady'. “Your former shekka
will be administered by the Eighth Wife. Get out of my sight, get out
of my household. I know you no longer.”
Shalali—the former Sixth Wife of Lord Kidoshu—gulped down a sob,
turned and fled out of the room. The only signs of her presence were
the slight blood stains on the floor, where drops had fallen from her
ripped ears and scratched skin.
I
stared in appalled silence. Of course, we had all heard of the Ritual
of Outcasting, but no one had ever seen
it invoked. Considering her attitude towards her shekka,
I couldn't feel too sorry for Shalali. But still...to outcast a Wife
with no warning...
“Girls,
retire back to your rooms in the Handmaiden's Hall, and wait for the
Eighth Wife to arrive. Steady One--” she looked at me with a look
of pleased poison over ice, “--return to your shekka.
Advise Governess what has happened here and make sure all know the
consequences of failing me.”
We
all bowed and did as she ordered. I ran back through the halls,
holding back tears of shame. I had believed I was helping the third
shekka,
but instead, the First Wife had used me as a tool in her punishment
of the Sixth.
The First Wife had made her point in front of all of us.
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Thursday, July 28, 2011
Admin Post: PDFs of initial chapters of "Cantadora" available!
PDFs of my the first chapters of my story Cantadora are available on my writer's website here:
http://writermum1.yolasite.com/
Look under the tab "PDFs of Novels". Chapter One: Parts 1,2 and Chapter 2, Parts 3, 4 and 5 are posted. More to come, and the full text will also be on Scribd.com in the near future!
Thanks,
Annie
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